Lots of variety of styles here. I’ll try and post as many as I can. Thanks for all your effort.
This is my story
Chapter 1
The mystery of the egg
On a shining morning, the egg family called Eggys were getting up from a noisy night
in their house( the egg family house was the box of the eggs). “This night was very
noisy don’t you think Max?” Dad wondered.
“Yes!” Max said.
“Breakfast, can you say to your brother that the breakfast is here!” Mum shouted.
“Okay, hey Johnny breakfast is done. Did you hear me?” Max asked.
“Max, can you go to your brother’s bedroom?
Mum shouted. “Okay”! Max replied.
“Oh no, Johnny is not here!!!”Max shouted.
Chapter 2:
We couldn’t find Johnny until we opened the door and you will not imagine what we observed was a broken egg. “Oh no, what I am going to do?” Mum said it worried.
“We find out who threw out Johnny,”dad said it with concern
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The next day Johnny wasn’t on the floor but there were hairs on the floor of colour black and green. They found that there were hairs on the floor of the broom.
Chapter 3:
That night there was 100% that they were going to find the person who killed Johnny.
They stayed awake for all of the night and guess what happens? The person who killed Johnny was a little girl, she was a sleepwalker.
The END!!!
Guillem L Y5B
Well done Guillem. Good punctuation using NSNL (New Speaker New Line for when we use dialogue).
This is a BookCreator from Adel that we have made into a video, so we can add it to the blog. I’ve learnt something new. I think Adel is going to add sound to it to improve it even more. Well done Adel – a great message in your story.
I will post lots more of your wonderful work soon. Are there any more entries? I will give a purple form to all the entries. YOU CAN DO IT!
Here is another from Candela.
The egg
Once upon a time, there were 3 little eggs called Floppy, Mopsy and Cottontail. One sunny day as they walked up they saw a strange looking thing black, it, it, it is hot? One of them said that it was a pan. Suddenly Mopsy said I need to go to the toilet but just before jumping. Flopps she said “wait a minute if we jump it is probably that one of us could happen some thing this my mum” she jumped and cracked herself and we had to cook her so we could eat it.
SUDDENLY Floppy said “ well let’s test it Floppy jumped and before someone could say anything he already was all cracked up on the floor. Cottontail said nearly crying “oh now what are we going to do without our Mopsyyyyyyy. SURPRISINGLY Mopsy came and said ”what all the noise of crying – my head had begun to hurt me a lot”. Floppy and Cotton suck their heads quickly and say you are alive and Mopsy says of course I am alive. Floppy said to “Mopsy do not that ever again I was afraid of what could happen to you” . And once was told that it never happened again so that’s why they lived happily ever after.
The poem is from Candela y5b.