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This is my story

Chapter 1 

The mystery of the egg

On a shining morning, the egg family called Eggys were getting up from a noisy night
in their house( the egg family house was the box of the eggs). “This night was very
noisy don’t you think Max?” Dad wondered.

 “Yes!” Max said.

 “Breakfast, can you say to your brother that the breakfast is here!” Mum shouted.

“Okay, hey Johnny breakfast is done. Did you hear me?” Max asked. 

“Max, can you go to your brother’s bedroom?
Mum shouted. “Okay”! Max replied.
“Oh no, Johnny is not here!!!”Max shouted.

Chapter 2:

We couldn’t find Johnny until we opened the door and you will not imagine what we observed was a broken egg. “Oh no, what I am going to do?” Mum said it worried.
“We find out who threw  out Johnny,”dad said it with concern

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The next day Johnny wasn’t on the floor but there were hairs on the floor of colour black and green. They found that there were  hairs on the floor of the broom.

Chapter 3:

That night there was 100% that they were going to find the person who killed Johnny.
They stayed awake for all of the night and guess what happens? The person who killed Johnny was a little girl, she was a sleepwalker.

The END!!!
Guillem L Y5B

Well done Guillem. Good punctuation using NSNL (New Speaker New Line for when we use dialogue).